All Comments on 'Poke-Slut Ch. 01'

Lovely story! Part 2 would be very exciting!~

Make her collect other trainers for her master while wearing her master in a specialized poke AL around her neck.

Very fun chapter 1! Maybe for chapter 2 Elaine could go undercover for her Hypno Master? Act as though she caught the hypno as a trainer and maintain the illusion that she's still a independent pokemon trainer as she helps Hypno capture more thralls?

Nice story, part two would be nice

Get more trainers transformed..

J'ai hâte de lire la suite !

You could have the poke-slut help spread Hypno's influence to friends and/or family

Next chapter he could hypnotize on of her friends?

Choose either third or second person perspective, switching between the two is just jarring and confusing. I recommend third person but either is okay. Not a bad first story don't be discouraged, keep it up and refine your writing i expect good things.

Interested to see where this goes

great start

Well you switched pronouns a bit throughout the story were you used “you” and “your” when you wanted “she” and “her”.

Make another one please

I am not judging you for this at all, but basically only some mythical and legendary pokemon talk, and hypno just says "Hypno. Hypno. Hypno" on reapeat.

Dude couldn’t pick a perspective or use the right you’re v your