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by RoomaniSyaahi

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RoomaniSyaahiRoomaniSyaahiabout 5 years agoAuthor
Please write your comments.

This is my first story here. Please help with a few moments of your time by writing a comment/ compliment ;)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 5 years ago
Door was closed so perfectly.......😍😍

Love it...... Saree is used up perfectly

GauchoManGauchoManabout 5 years ago

Hello again Roomani

I've read this story after reading the other two, and can make out a difference in the writing.

This story in particular could do with the hand of an editor.

I love the way you write in the 3rd person with a noticeable lack of dialogue.

All 3 of your submissions were enjoyable.

Do keep writing.

:rose:

GM

RoomaniSyaahiRoomaniSyaahiabout 5 years agoAuthor
Thanks GM

Hello again, Thanks again.

Well, this was the first piece, and I did a lot of reading post this. On second read, now; there's so much more I can edit here. But the first one is always so special I'm glad this was published! :)

Sincerely

S

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Amateur writer here. Essentially a creative soul turned romantic at the hands of an equally loving husband. I write about experiences and fantasies alike, straight from India.