All Comments on 'Robin's Journey - Final Chapter'

Some things you need to figure out are the semi-colon, the space bar, dialogue mechanics, and participles.

All of those things you use incorrectly, resulting in unclear, annoying, confusing writing, and I'm using the word 'writing' loosely regarding what you do.

I can't even comment on the story itself because the writing wasn't good enough to put it out there.

I wasn't annoyed or confused. Stick at it and try to improve your grammar. Thank you for publishing.

Saying that the writing was too poor to be able to enjoy the story is a bit dramatic. Honestly I thought it was written well enough for something so hot and heavy. I did however wish you had dragged it on a bit, giving us a chance to savor each moment would have been nice.