by suggestiveness
I love the way you describe each thing that she does that makes her such a naughty little girl. Every instance I was in constant oh no shes gonna get caught this time. over all 5 star quality. I do have to agree with everyone on the switching persons views had me confused for a bit.
and am looking forward to reading more of your exploits, hoping, along with you, that someday you do get caught. and punished.
This story is great. I worked hard not to come before the end. You need to work on keeping a constant point of view, but keep writing!
It seems as if Sarah and I enjoy the same game. However, I agree, why the switch from "she" and "her" to "me" and "I"? Otherwise, it is a lovely, naughty story. Would love to hear more.
I loved the teasing way this is written. But I'm confused about Sarah being "she" and "I" -- why the switch? It strikes me that the story would be hotter if it stayed put with the point of view.
Nicely done, builds up well and lets us hope that she will get caught in the end. Hope that there will be more chapters and more and closer shaves!
Builds tension and excitement gradually until you can almost taste her pleasure in the the teasing. Beautifully written. Thank-you.
more i want more... need more... does he catch her... oooh god i hope he does