All Comments on 'Sharing Pt. 03'

Who writes three chapters of the most unreadable goo ever posted here. Go, the fuck, away.

This didn't fix it. It flushed it.

Thanks for the story. I would love my husband to treat me like this. It’s not his nature unfortunately.

I haven’t been on here in a few months but I see that the pathetic troll is still around posting negative post after post. I think his friends need to hold an intervention.

Regardless of the subject matter, this was badly written. Bad POV. Bad dialogue. If you want to write BDSM, post it there. Either get editorial help or never post again.

No stars.

I would have enjoyed it more if the lover had also been bare.

Have to give you credit, you continue to swim against the tide of negative comments ,holding to your own course. You're not taking any constructive advice, nor are you making any positive changes. A *2 for persistance, as there is nothing else here.

Or the author wrote the entire thing and submitted all three parts at the same time, but they weren’t approved at the same time.

I was holding out hope that this guy would finally grow a pair and take back his marriage, but that ship sailed. Writing is food enough to stand alone against this horrid story so a 2** for trying.

We are now up to Pt.03 and I assume that the whole serial has been written and possibly submitted for daily posting.

So even if BrokenUnicorn had taken commenters' advice about second person narration, there's not much that could be done about it, so continuing comments and complaints are not going to change anything.

A little more encouragement from the LW commentariat wouldn't go astray occasionally. Apart from Pt.01, I haven't read any others all the way through because of my dislike for second person narration, but from skimming the other parts it appears to me that BU is a very competent author and subsequent stories could hold some promise.

Lue

Truly enjoyed this story..wanted it to continue on

This was truly a great story. There was a great deal of love between the couple, and the story was very steamy as well. I’m not sure why people aren’t enjoying this, but I sure did. Thank you for posting it.