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All Comments on 'Sheetal - The Long Hair Goddess'

by dd8565

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AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

You have butchered the English language. Meyar your stories will sound better if written in Gujarati or Hindi?

If you don’t have the patience to write more than 1500 words at a time, why would a reader have the patience to wait for the next half a page of your writing?

sheeversheever3 months ago

A good 1st.chapter .. probably just need an editor and then get on with your saga ...

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