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TotosRevenge over 1 year ago

Chapters are way too short. Need to develop the story then find a natural break for the next chapter. Nothing wrong withmore than one POV in a chapter. So far the little bits are nice. Keep it up.

CasinoRoyale430 over 1 year agoAuthor

@TotosRevenge I really appreciate your comments. I read you comments about chapter 3 before reading this one. I am considering Throwing Chapters 1-3 into one chapter. I'm a complete noob and a really appreciate your feedback.

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