All Comments on 'Subjugating Nina Pt. 01'

Wrong category

Garbage. Ciche and tropes throughout. A wasted first effort.

I wish there were more stories that didn't paint black guys as predator animals, without morals. That's what most of these are. Oh, and most white girls aren't screaming sluts looking for a black cock. In a category called "interracial love," there sure is a lack of it in the stories.

Sorry, but this is goddamned full of typos till I am not sure who fucks who.

Editor required! Not a bad story.

Full of potential, especially chapter 2. A decent story but you require an editor to help. So once you write chapter 2 reach out to an editor or myself, someone who will help you with the story.

Typos, stereotypes, grammatical errors, cliches? Yes. No question about it. But there's something else too. A raw quality that i admire, that excited me. i hope you won't let this be your last effort. Don't allow the criticism of some stop you. Think about what they've said - good and bad - and let it improve your next work. i hope there will be a next work. i really do!

I appreciate the feedback, chapter 2 will develop the characters further, the fact the two men were black is slightly tangential to the story, older experienced men can be predators to a degree what ever their race. Appreciate the offers of help, will reach out.