All Comments on 'Taking Daddy's Morning Load'

Your writing is not very imaginative. You used hot wet hole and hot wet load over and over. It got kinda boring and not very sexy.

Use a variety of sexy terms to keep the mood and always make sure you are very descriptive to pull the reader into the story like if it's a woman reading! Then she feels like she's the one being loved that way

Overall it's a good effort could've been longer

Well, really good short story. Don't know if the 'pussy' in this case is meant to be a female pussy or a male ass but it is erotic and seems consensual.

Hot. Really enjoyed this one. I’m not so much into the daddy thing unless it’s not her actual father and just the d/s situation. Still very nicely done author. I would enjoy a good fuck like that.