by AnotherOldWriter
Great story with some very sympathetic characters. I look forward to the next chapter.
Up until now, each of the episodes in this series has basically been a jerk off story . Hot body, hot, sex, rinse and repeat.
With this installment, however, you’ve actually achieved a sense of humanity. People who care about each other in other than sexual ways. Actual character development, where these characters adapt and change according to their new experiences.
This is your actual first piece of erotic literature. I truly hope ensuing episodes don’t turn back into fuck stories.