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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
please continue!

Your first submission, The Arrival, is a good romance story, but too short! Accordingly, please continue this story, and please, keep writing! Thank you.

AnonymousAnonymous12 months ago
too short!

This chapter has great romance in it, but it is much too short. The introduction to the characters is much too sketchy, and the build-up too short. The love scene is very sweet, but obviously left unfinished.

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Hello darlings! My name is Viola and I'm an adventurous storyteller who loves living life to the fullest. I create captivating tales that transport you to a world where dreams and desires come true. My writing is carefully crafted to engage your imagination and stir your deepe...

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