All Comments on 'The Dream'

I appreciate the effort you put into this first draft. However, I highly recommend using a thesaurus so you don't beat the ever-loving fuck out of words like "moist" and "slather." Once is enough.

In all seriousness, I think it's pretty cool you have the skill (well, or you think you do) and the confidence to put yourself out there in this way.

Great story...you are a romantic, aren't you! The only thing that could have improved it for me, was that we did not know it was a dream until the end...but a small point. Greats story, great sex.

You pack in a lot of scorching action for such a short story. Very sensuous and very erotic. Super writing - wish it were a film! :D Brilliant, loved it, thank you.