All Comments on 'The Gold One and the Tribe Elder'

I quite enjoyed this story! Though, I must say, it is the first Prince Gyllen story I have finished (found it through the tags), I am a whore for fantasy and worldbuilding so I might read the other parts now. Femboys are lovely, and when writing you can put them in so many scenarios, don't you think? Both where they are more "active" and "passive". The writing was nice also, it is interesting to see you use a more "high" style, fitting the world and characters, than in your Lilith stories. In dialogue it can become a bit stilted but it is preferrable to slang when writing fantasy, I think. You also kept your witty and snarky humour which is enjoyable. My comment is already long and I barely discussed the story itself, but to finish I am more eager now to read your past works, and anything you may have planned for the future!

Even the first sentence is a fine example of your good writing: "In the furthest corner of this far-flung planet, on a continent uncharted by the cartographers of Occassus, Purvaja or Kusini, night blanketed the landscape from east to west, though it was anything but silent for a small village that lay not too far from its north-western tip amongst a grove within a plain betwixt a jungle on one side and a range of hills on the other"! Maybe it owes a little to Lost World stories? The comparisons to mating animals on the other hand gave the story a funny side. The plot itself reminds me of that folk story of the beautiful woman who turns into a hag by day. Though since I have just gotten a slight eye infection the mention of one blind eye feels a bit strange. Anyways this turned out a bit rambling, and I hope my other comment gets published here first