by MosheDovit
Good premise.
You need to learn the proper use of YOUR vs. YOU'RE.
No mention of having had Connor clean out his ass before the ass fucking.
Needed more dialog about having him eat pussy before and during it. How he was supposed to do it. How fast. How slow? What he should be concentrating on.
Four stars.
Still have errors scewered? Is that supposed to be skewered of screwed? both of which would work here.