All Comments on 'The Oathkeepers Ch. 04'

I am starting to hate paragon. So, amazing story. Can't wait to see how it goes.

Keep them coming they are brilliant

@SkuldTheNorn, this story is incredible. As a reader of fiction and mainly science fiction for over 20 years that is a work of art with the potential to be among the best. This reminds me of a story I read probably 20+ years ago about an entire species that had been conjugated and enslaved by alien invaders and how they turned the tables and got their ultimate revenge.

The one thing that holds you back is that the pace and flow of the stories sometimes are not a fluid and smooth as they could be but once you master that but one you master that you have the potential to be up there with the best of them. Good job!

I love the story. But just wondering will Aegis even want her after so many times of paragon pummeling her sex?!!! I can't imagine still being turned on by that person...

Who can assassinate this asshole? That's not love and he's no paragon.

Brilliant love it

can you make paragon more likeable? the story sets us up to dislike him and we get all this backstory about her and the black oathkeeper but there’s nothing to look forward too if paragon is a psychopath. paragons character isn’t well developed. also can you focus on aftercare after an intense sex scene like that? it would help Zoe bond with paragon and make it more a love triangle instead of Aegis being a cuck and fluffer for paragon. i mean how am we supposed to ship Zoe and Aegis when he doesn’t have the balls to stand up to Paragon? or paragons character isn’t developed or likeable where there is a noticeable tension between who she’s really gravitating towards? i love the creative story building but character building needs growth

I love this story and it totally turning me on.

(there are two places at the top of the page where it says eegis instead of Paragon)