All Comments on 'The Peachwillow Chronicles Pt. 02'

You have a great story going on here but you need to fill in the gaps. I have no idea why they are killing the beast or how they got there. There is literal pages of content that you could have wrote from travelling the city and fighting the steppe elves.

I would recommend slowing down and I noticed the sex scenes are rushed if you don't like then then just cut them out, its the story that matters. You've got a great thing going on here, just slow down a bit.