All Comments on 'The Sweet Slut In Training Ch. 01'

..this looks like the beginning of a wonderful novelette. I'm already in love with the innocence of your character, Valerie, and the founding premise of the story.....I'm hooked!,....and will be looking forward to any forthcoming installments!! Thank you.

it a long story. you already showed all that's gona happen. and also your attitude of what you think is erotic. thanks for trying.

The set up of the story was all wrong - I know you wanted to have 'Valerie' all alone a long way from home, but you could have done that with a girl from New Mexico in New York. Unfortunately, there is no way you can just fly into the US and start work - although you could perhaps work illegally doing more menial tasks if you walk across the border but Valerie would be Valesca and have a Spanish accent.

Hated how it started, really hated it.

Then the offer, I mean talk about offended.

Then she tells us what she's thinking about it and her acceptance, of how she might enjoy the arrangement, Then I actually thought this has potential.

It does have that massive flaw regarding the immigration issue. I’m not American but even I know getting permission to visit for a holiday is hard enough, visitors need to give proof of financial independence. In her case she’d need a work permit, so yes the reality slap was very off putting.

Not insurmountable by any means having her arrive with the relevant paperwork is easy enough, add in a mugging and suddenly she’s financially vulnerable. I know the story has been abandoned but I haven’t checked to see if it’s complete or not.

Tess (UK)