All Comments on 'The Trials of Talia Pt. 05'

I'm glad you're trying to take the story out of the hotel/inn. Talia has places to go! I think this will open a ton of new doors for her and keep the story from getting stagnant. Some of the dialogue seems a tad unrealistic, but I can't say I'm the best with writing it myself either. Glad you're still writing this!