All Comments on 'The Vacation Wife'

The story is missing necessary background. Why would wife get pregnant with stranger -- was she not on birth control, and, if not, why could not husband have gotten her pregnant?

Also, why not simply terminate the pregnancy.

The missing elements prevent a full comprehension of the story.

Weak logic. Not well thought out. 2*

Giving you the benefit if the doubt for a 1st-time author, you had an interesting theme going, but didn't provide the end of the tale.

If you're hoping someone else will finish it, you should note that to be the case... if there are more parts coming, you should DEFINITELY note that, because in LW, the criticism will come quickly from the anotake.

3 stars for what's here, but carrying it forward could improve the scoring.

Good luck to you either way.

Since this wasn't labeled chapter one, I'll assume you're finished. Which means this lackluster effort is completely unfinished and not worth the time to read in the first place.

she stopped him and put on a condom, so tell us again how she got pregnant. Also was she not having sex with her husband? questions and errors in this story , try again.

Beyond hot when the cheating wife gets pregnant..if he’s a true beta he’ll understand that he’ll just have to work harder to support the family..maybe he will come to understand how hot it is to watch your wife live this lifestyle. Maybe he’ll suck her bulls’ cocks. He’ll probably just melt when she begs him for forgiveness, and getting hard as he sees her in a sexy black bra and pantyhose. She’ll calmly squeeze his hard cock, knowing she’s in charge..

Boy that was a fast ons.

Epilogue: Mia's husband wasn't a cuck or a wimp. He was a good guy who provided well for her and didn't deserve the shit she was shoveling. So once she explained everything he asked her to write it down so he could digest it. The cheating skank slut was stupid enough to do it. He then gave it to his lawyer and proceeded to divorce her whore ass. The idiot bimbo has now joined the ranks of stupid single divorced moms. Dumb bitch!

What the fuck was this?

Pointless

So if there is a part two then the husband should dump the fucked up cheating bitch and find someone who isn't going to open her cunt to anyone with a cock that walks by.

there are no "right words"

Only rights words would be okay I'll sign the papers

So? Was the husband a wimp?

Okayyyyy...*shrugs shoulders and moves on*

Look, either finish the story or say there’s more to come. If you are not going to finish a story, have enough consideration to state it at the beginning so as not to waste our time with you. A couple of other authors don’t finish stories and they are shunned by a large number of readers. It’s just lazy.

I'll with hold comment until I see if you finish this. Finished you have the makings of a good story--at least the beginning--but as is, it isn't worth reading. I apologize in advance for being so blunt, but those of us who say nice things trying not to hurt your feelings are not helping you. Consider constructive criticism, apply when it makes sense and you'll turn out some good stories. cd

Where's the rest of the story?

I hope there's more. 3 stars, the Bear is waiting.

The BEAR

Is she so stupid she doesn't know about plan b or abortion? I guess in this story she is. I hope the author lets the husband burn the shit out of the slut.

Horrible

Where’s the rest of the story?

Where is the rest?

WTF? Two stars ⭐️ for this one.

FTDS

You haven't said this was a multi-part story. As such you've left an audience standing on the roadside in the dark. That's irritating. On top of it you gave us a thoughtless, self-centered, and above all stupid, main character in Mia. She stops him not once, but twice and on the second occurrence she pulls the condom off of him (the only smart thing about the whole stupid thing she's doing) and goes back to screwing the guy!?

Perfect pseudonym for writing about a cheating cunt.

Some stories are written as snippets. This was a good one.

You should have explained how much hotter preg risk sex was when she ripped the condom off. It is even hotter (at the time) if now wanted, which is clear from her reaction.

Now, what is the slut going to do about it?

This is clearly the appetizer. Eagerly awaiting the main course

This was just bad, poorly written nonsense and the fact that anyone enjoyed it makes me supremely concerned for the human race.