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Killer saw Lena duck into a bar with a neon sign saying "Justines" about four blocks off the Reeperbahn. He waited a few minutes to enter to not be discovered but regretted waiting when he found that Lena was not in the bar.
It was a small bar but there was a guarded door leading to a back room. Rather than talk to the guard, he asked the bartender why the guard was there.
"Behind the door, there is a private club for people with special tastes."
"What kind of special tastes?" Killer asked.
"Let's just say that the way you are dressed, you might fit right in, particularly if those cowboy boots mean you know how to handle a whip. But single males are not normally allowed, and all guests need an invitation from a member and to show identification and a health card showing you can participate safely," the bartender replied.
Looking again, Killer saw a sign he hadn't noticed before saying "Heute Abend, Teufel und Giftig." Killer who had visited Germany many times and studied the language some, knew that meant "Tonight, Devil and Poisonous." He walked back to his hotel enjoying the sounds and sights of perhaps the greatest red-light district in the world.
- COMMENTS
Sleepiscousinofdeath8 months agoMost the other commentary comes from coined niche experts. As a more generalist fiction reader this is very very good. McCarthy would do more showing than telling but you're getting your story on paper and it's interesting and honest.
If it's two parts in story telling. The story and then how it's told this is more the first. But the art has been created and it's relevant like nothing I've read anywhere.
Anonymous11 months agoAmong many questionable elements of worldbuilding, somehow the least believable is that free staters under God would accept a microchip implant given to outsiders.
Anonymous11 months agoThe exposition here feels like it's worst of both worlds. You're having characters dump out tons of info that everyone involved should already know, so you don't really get a cleanly written history but it also feels really forced. Either sneak in the exposition or directly give it to us, but this compromise is terrible.
Anonymous11 months agoIndeed, plot line looks generic, but tons of imaginative fresh details really make for a great read. Near perfect introduction to universe and main cast. Hope there are more chapters to come, with similarly high level character interactions and plot twists.
Thanks and all the best.
