All Comments on 'Unlocking Bree Pt. 01'

What do you say since this is your first time writing I will be nice let me begin the story is what we class as the stuff we want to disposed of ( GARBAGE) then we go over to the big noticeable thing that everyone does not like in this section called sharing or what another thing they call it oh yes swinging which is commonly done in what they call GROUPS so unless you have a idea that it’s only done with one single person you really need to either stop writing or get an editor so let us sum this up this garbage should be in the group section but please do your homework never presume I has to go into the loving wife section ok

but for sure someone in the writer's family. Or is this a letter that he received? Doesn't matter! This is pure garbege.

I look forward to part 2.

You do need an editor. It will help a lot. The story idea was not bad. But needed to be developed better. No depth and it was over even before it started...

Over too soon. Finish the story... You drew me in and then.....

This milf didn't seem very reluctant to become a hot whore. Why are LW whore's always described as reluctant, shy, prim, prudish, etc? They all seem pretty eager to step out.

In my early 20s I would cruise the stores and flirt with salesmen (and occasionally sales women), do lunch, then head off to a quiet place or motel for a good two to three hour fuck, suck, and screw session. But none of that condom stuff...I like hot cum to run down my legs...and none of that giving away panties...I never wear them. My husband would ask about my day when we retired for the evening. I would tell him and it turned him on...so another two hour fucking, sucking, and screwing session would happen! Great sex is pickup sex!

Another fan of the wife who steps out reading club being heard from here.

I do hope you continue this story on. Would prefer husband not find out and seek retribution. That changes story perspective to a less read worthy status among some the current followers of your offering.

Leave a few of the details out to allow a readers experiences to rule their brain. An example would be from paragraph one;

"She was dressed casually in jeans and a plain top but she's the kind of gal you can imagine in a slinky dress and six inch stilettos."

TRY LESS IS MORE

Your use of "stilettos" paints a pole dancer as your male characters preferred female image and that bends him to become a smaller percentage of men in general.

TRY THIS

She was dressed casually in jeans and a plain top. This a gal I could imagine wearing a slinky dress and heels.

Speaking character owns his statement.

Thanks for sharing and look forward to more.