All Comments on 'Videos Lead to Divorce Pt. 02 - Conclusion'

Fucking awful, just awful.

Scores 1/5

Was there a point to this shit???

Wtf was that....after the shit that bitch said I woulda tried hard to make sure she WAS implicated in his crimes. Who tf did she think she was?

Incredibly boring, terrible writing style.

If I had known that the finale would be so faded, I wouldn't have read the first part either. An intriguing beginning and continuation - zilch. As they say, he promised a dollar, but did not give a cent. Speaking of money, my time is very expensive, so, author, you owe me a lot of money.

You are a awful story teller

Wait! So her was of respectfully telling our narrator he was a cuck was with Google videos? I would imagine that it would have been more respectful to just tell the poor sap that shit wasn't working and get the divorce. Let's not pretend this story is anything more than a 1/5. After the 1st chapter I didn't think we would get a BTB but I definitely didn't expect this lackluster ending.

this was an extremely poorly written and outlined story..

He deserved better than her. She will never be happy. If couples don’t communicate their issues, they can’t solve them. He found a better woman and started a family. Fifty years on he will be surrounded by love while she will be surrounded by her cats.

She recorded the videos to show respect for her husband? WTF!

More a boilerplate document with story ideas than an actual story.

2*

I agree that it makes no sense to help her out unless he would lose money if she was somehow convicted. Just the cost of the lawyers would be huge. What a wuss.

It was an OK story, till it just died suddenly at the end. You think there's going to be some big confrontation at the end and it just shudders to a halt.

Just a "Meh" ending

What a let down .2 She never gave a shit about him.

The first chapter was interesting even if the style of writing was a bit off-putting. I had hoped this chapter would be at least slightly better.

Unfortunately with her whole monologue about how he sucked all the energy and emotion out of her I found it much worse.

Makes me hate that I spent the time to read it.

Rarely have I read a worse story than this one. Not once did I feel like I was learning anything interesting. The idiot lets his wife fool him and doesn't even protest. Just the videos that idiot has in his hands will bring him millions in the divorce. But, I think he's a Brit and we know about them, the women are whores and the men are born cuckolds!1*!

His wife not sorry, even her lover was a con-man who almost put her in to a jail??? But she gets no punishment? Husband just accepts it and moves on with his life??? What exactly is the point of this story????

2 starrs

So bad. Just awful.

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1 *

It felt rushed, incomplete, and disorganized. Those are the high points.

Dry as a fart in a barrel and stinky too. Nuff said.

Captcha

There might have been a story under there, but it's so horribly written that I can't be sure.

Cheating bitch stayed true to her nature. She didn’t lie to him at least.

Piece of shit story. A waste of time.

Well, that was right boring.

She fucks around on him, rubs it in his face with a video, tells him she loved her lover more than she ever loved him and he helps keep her out of jail and wishes her well? are you kidding me? What a dipshit! He deserve3d everything he got.

Ended way too fast and the concept was bad.

Okay!

4

Reads more like a to-do list than a story.

Meh....

But the writing was decently done, so find a better plot idea and keep writing.

MLJ

Nothing but an outline for a really bad cuckold story. Really bad. Fix the tags.

Nice story! Well done!

Wierd.

WTF?

This was... Not good.

I can't imagine any human not a sociopath that would handle the insane amount of disrespect, shake his wife's hand and say "cheers, thanks for the cucking"

First chapter was okay, second needs a total rewrite.

What the actual fuck was that supposed to be?

I agreed with James G 5.

Just because you can write doesn’t mean you should write. This sounds like a dumb rambling of some drunk idiot

Just no.

Writing in bimbo men and smart sick women for fun.

I like the ending, glad to see the stupid cow is livingm an empty life and he is living well.

Yep just as I thought, turned out to be bollocks.

What a bunch of idiotic ramblings the MC is to stupid to pass a 3rd grade test you pick the topic, the wife is an evil vindictive btch, a narcissist and completely self-entitled, o.k. what else is new. This story is a total waste of time, I can feel my IQ has dropped just from reading it.

No rational explanation why the husband (a) stuck around during the police inquiry into his wife, and (b) stuck around while she monologued about what an emotional black hole he was. Any sane person would have long since nope'd out.

That was disappointing. It read like a framework, with bullet points and to-do notes, of a larger and complete story.

Before you publish any more stories, sit on the story for a couple of weeks. however long it takes to "forget" the story. Then read it, not as the author, as a reader so you can see what we do.

Not many commenters are very polite about how the give feedback, but listen to those that give you some quality suggestions.

A doormat to the end.

This story is like walking into a room where a gorgeous naked woman is pleading with you to come make love to her, you pull your pants down and you have the anatomy of a Ken doll.

After listening to what his wife had to say about him, how could he not have wanted to at least bitch slap her.