All Comments on 'Voyeurs & Blindfolds Ch. 01'

Excellent story. Well written. So, thank you. However, I hate to be pedantic but... please use an editor. You constantly use "quite" when you mean "quiet" (a low level of sound) plus learn the difference between "your", "you are" and its abbrev of "you're". You kept using "your" when it should have been "you're". eg "You're a server. You're an adult..."

Your writing is too good to be sullied by stupid errors. Keep writing. Cheers.

It turns out LenardSpencer has already written exactly what I planned to say myself, so I second his comments. I'm very much looking forward to how this story develops.

SO hot for all involved...young Deb so turned she starts to diddle herself...

easy five

certainly going to check out your other works, and some interesting Similar Stories in side bar

Excellent, sexy and suspenseful, keep going but do check grammar.