All Comments on 'Watched'

And now you really have something to think about when you jack off.

Enjoyed this story and the way you managed the two tracks: his imagined scene with his girlfriend as he masturbated, and his sister-in-law's masturbatory action watching him. It would be fun to see a sequel where somehow he manages to speak to her about what she saw and what she did.

rubbish

Interesting premise.

But much too abbreviated.

Better if he'd invited her in to watch closely.

Better if she'd shed her clothes.

Better if she joined him with mutual masturbation.

Etc.

Two stars.

Watching family or in-laws masturbate is so hot. Or being watched.

Characters need names and you need to use them to remove ambiguity.

Very confusing. Who's doing what where? And then nothing really happens. I was hoping she'd get on the bed with him and start fucking him. Re write this one, it has potential.

Too short to mean anything. It's kind of like a sentence with a subject but no predicate.

Excellent juxtaposition. Pretty erotic...enjoyed it.

Stupid.