by Duckamuck
For me, the fact her husband didn't do anything to help his wife, was a total turnoff.
Good first attempt, enjoyed reading it and looking forward to reading what happened next. Nice to reveal that you are the submissive, made it much more fun.
You need to learn the basics of writing in English. If you don't want to do that then most people will not want to read your stories. I couldn't bring myself to progress more than a few sentences into it.
What kind of asshole just stands there and watches his wife get beat be it man or woman I would have kicked Kaylas fucking ass out of the house.