All Comments on 'With Great Power... Pt. 03'

Ok this is getting good, looking forward to PT4 to 44

Please please please mess with people in the most sordid way

Enjoyed 1 and 2 but employing the "race card" aspect ruined this chapter for me. I get too much of that deluded, hyperbolic nonsensical fiction in the real world.

The anger and hatred comes through pretty thick, especially for a guy that we really don't know anything about.

A "great power" and he's stuck on ruining peoples' lives? That might be a little believable at first because he's just carried away with the potential, but after the first day or two..... you'd think that he'd start wondering about how he could set himself up to be wealthy and not have to work anymore. Or what threats might be out there hunting people like him. Or how the magic works and if others also have it.

This chapter really drove that incongruity home because the guy went out of his way to find a family to ruin in the worst way. Why? Or is it the author projecting?

Ferrumitzal-I kind of addressed this at the top of this story. Of course all my stories have a part of me in them, or I would not be able to write them. There is a reason I chose Twisted Dave as my Nom de plume... Some of your concerns are addressed in part 4. Part 5 sees more consequences for David's actions. This is not going to be a quick story, hopefully my readers will believe that it grows over time and comes to a plausible and satisfying conclusion. All I want to do is take you on an adventure that you end up enjoying. If I am lucky you will think you have been on an E-ticket ride at Disney (if you know what an E-ticket was)

1 star for no cuck warning.

I only warn for cuck if the MC is getting cucked and doesn't fight back. Which, never happens in my stories... Well I guess never say never, it might happen.