by MissGivings
I am as 21st century as they come, but the smart money is knowing when to lay low and let those who can can. Modern women are still women and Lisette was clearly in no position to handle what could have still been lurking in her spot. The author was wise to let Torrin handle the situation.
I don't like that she just sat there and started crying when she saw her apartment had been trashed. Any normal, modern woman would been mad as hell. I wold not have let a man sit me back down in a car and let him do all the investigating.
I was a bit disappointed after the first chapter...just left wanting more...I think combining these two chapters would be best...to drag people in. I kept reading b/c i wanted to see where it would go. You needed to have this in the first chapter so that you set up the reason to keep reading...the story firmly established and leaving you wanting to know what will happen.
keep writing!
Wow!! That was definitely an attention grabber. Great work.
Just wishing for longer chapters. Quality work, though. Thanks for writing!
I would like to read more of this story. The set up is great and it has me hooked. Now lets continue it.
you have set the stage well for upcoming action. The character and scene descriptions are well done but maybe a bit too brief. Nice balance of dialogue and backgroud information. I am looking forward to reading the next chapter.
Your doing great. I'm really looking forward to reading more. :)
Your doing great. I'm really looking forward to reading more. :)
Fantastic work! Although Lis did agree to go with Tor way to easily.... But maybe she is really that trusting and innocent. Really looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks for writing.
I love the story line and how your progressing gradually instead of rushing. Keep writing can't wait for the next chapter. Thanks and good luck.
I love your slow beginning into the storyline. You are setting up th rest of the story and I can't wait to read more.