All Comments on 'Woman in Red Catches Her Eye'

love it, hopefully a part 2.

Providing a character’s dimensions is a sign of an inexperienced writer (that, and using ‘pert’). They do not aid in setting the scene or moving the story forward. If one character finds another attractive or cute, have them say so. The rest of the writing is quite good, even if the sex is a bit rushed. I look forward to more.

Oh we need more about these people and their gradually expanding group!

Thanks for the constructive criticism although I write a lot for my 9-to-5 job the past 41 years. Then again, writing for Lit is a different kind of writing. There may be another chapter.

thought it was a little short but very good for a series. they have the rest of the week as well as the girls day. hope you will do more.