All Comments on 'Joan Ch. 12'

It's missing some of the internalization that should make this really a more enjoyable read than it is. It was obvious that Joan was going to turn and corrupt Thea, she wouldn't be able to resist...but it would have been much better to get inside of her head and see her struggle with it. To be mortified and upset by the fact that she was going to obey and do the same horrible thing to another woman. Maybe she'd even try to resist, she'd have second thoughts, etc.

Kind of a waste of a character to just have Thea completely corrupted in one shot like this.

I like how you lead in for future story for Joan but name 2 spin off stories. Hopefully you will slow down the pacing a bit. You are getting quite hurried.