All Comments on 'Another Slut Like Me Ch. 02'

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HentaiLoverHentaiLoverover 1 year ago

The Premise of the story is great, but i think you need to lengthen it. Show us more the inside view of what the characters are feeling or thinking. Extend the dialogue, it sometimes feels very rushed. And try to get a proof reader for errors. In first chapter for example u confused his and her at some points

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