All Comments on 'Collage Adventures Ch. 02 - Spring Break'

This is worse than the first one. I felt like you were scribbling down notes for ideas with no thought whatsoever to punctuation or spelling. This wouldn't even be passable as a rough draft.

If you care so little about putting out something entertaining, why do you even bother? Nobody would care, or even notice, if you just went away.

I was the one that recommended you find a proofreader in your first "College Adventures" story, that's still painfully true. The basis of this chapter isn't bad, but I'm not sure how the aunt fits in to the overall story, maybe in chapter three. Keep going, you'll get better.