All Comments on 'Colleen Ch. 03'

Beautifully told and well written this is a story what true should always be. I agree with the author the fact that they are brother and sister does not matter a jot. They are two people who are lucky enough to have found the kind of love that all aspire to and few are fortunate enough to find.

the end brought a tear to my eye, not because of the events but because it was, in fact, ending. this is probably my favorite story on literotica and i will likely be back very soon to read it all over again. i became attached to the characters and their personalities perhaps too much, but forget that, this story was beautiful. let me tell you something, three words that i only have typed in the comments of 2 stories before now, words that may not mean much to anyone but me and words that i will only say or type to to people who i believe are truly amazing and deserve compliments that mean something to even one person. nice job, mate.

Simply one of the best stories on the entire website. I’ve read it three times. The romance is sweet, the kids are great, and the golf humor is super.

What an amazing story! I find it amazing that someone has the ability to write such an amazing story. It was quite a ride with the storyline, that could have you laughing one moment and teary eyed the next. Thank you Chris

I have to say this was one of the best romance stories I've ever read, not much else on Literotica can compete. This was the last thing you ever uploaded to this site, almost 14 years ago to the date (as of me writing this). Whatever the reason for that - good or bad - I hope you're doing well

I do believe I have read this before, and posted comments after THAT reading! But I feel bound to say, again, how much this story moves me!

I had to tell my wife how much I missed her, after she was gone for a few hours today...she laughed at me, like she does a lot...told me to "quit being weird!" She also knows I am still smitten with her, just like Bobby and Colleen are after all the years!

The comments about this being a love story, showing the understanding that this is about love, not control, or domination, or anything BUT LOVE...even with the trials that come with a relationship. Too many people today do not understand COMMITMENT and the carrying out of promises made (as Barbara did not)...we live in a throw-away society, and many good relationships are lost due to not wanting to go through the PAIN!

And, to the post about Mark Twain's stories being considered RACIST in today's environment, I agree with that evaluation; also, I feel badly for the world that this is how we perceive classics that reflect the times!

MADDOG in Texas

I absolutely loved this work! I seriously had a hard time putting it down to do other things. I laughed, cheered, cried and was completely immersed into this story. Thank you for taking the time to share with us! The only thing I hated? The ending (it didn’t keep going) excellent from start to finish!

I agree with a lot of the comments already written. This is at the top of my list of enjoyable story that I have ever read.

Keep up the wonderful words that you put into stories.

To quote Tina Turner - "Simply the Best"

Extraordinary tale by an extraordinary author. Second reading and looking forward to read it again in 3 years time.

WAUW !

Thanks for sharing ;-)

What a beautiful, beautiful story. Thank you!

FANTASTIC READ! Thank you so much for sharing your talent. DMW

i read this for the first time 5 or 6 years ago and i loved it i completley forgot about it but it is so sweet and funny and heartwarming all while managing to stay hot and sexy. you are a incredible writer and should really get a book deal for this

Great story ending! Thanks for wrapping up this wonderful story. I could really feel the love between Bobby and Colleen. Truly touching moments that caused me to shed tears.

Thanks again!!

I’m glad I found the third chapter. I had read up to chapter two a month ago and just today found the next and final one. I found this to be such a lovely story. It was especially nice to find the wonderful, loving, and nice O’Connor characters and their friends. You did such a truly amazing job finding and developing everyone’s voice. Keep it up.

Great Story. VERY emotional. HOWEVER: What happened to Derrick Andrews in Chicago was explained but I was a little (miniscule) dissatisfied that we never found out what happened to Barbara. Sorry I can only give you a 5 out of 5 (LOL). This series is definitely in my Favs. Keep writing.

OH - I Forgot, Dare (and double dare) accepted AND completed (at on sitting).

Great !!!!!

Not able to know what happened to barbara was something that kept my mind not make peace with that part of bobby's life. Well at first even bobby wanted to know why she did. I guess the reason for not asking about details when he got derrick's was that it might over turn some stones of thoughts and emotions which are better not being overturned. When one person is having a good life, why provoke old painful thoughts which wont help by any means huh ?

That was the only part which was left unanswered. What happened to her still lingers over the back of the mind tho. Anyways this was a wonderful story.

That was an extremely satisfying read! I sat down, read all three chapters, and was thoroughly captivated by the flow of the story. I even cried with the characters, that's how emotionally invested I became. Cheers to Texas Refugee for this nugget of entertainment.

Best Read for a very long time.

I've read a lot of stories on this and other sites. But even so, this magnificient master piece manages to overshadow every single one of them. I've read this one twice as of now (first time was this year in february and the second time in july). But I'm gonna read it again, very soon.

When I was done reading this I was quiet. This story just left me in peace when I finished. Absolutely loved it. This goes in my 'reread' column. Thank you very much for such an extraordinary piece.

I keep hoping the author will return and publish a sequel or spinoff but so far nothing, always hope, so return some don't.

2cd time reading this and still one of the best story's I have read and have been reading books since 4th grade and am over 60 now. Thank you for your time and work.

Well done! "Writing is hard work."

I wish I could do this type of writing, but alas, I caanot.

Excellent end to an excellent story!

I've held off making an account on here until now but, having read this beautiful and heartwarming story, I just might have to - for no other reason than to add this to my favourites. I guess I'm a soppy old sod at heart, because you had me in tears - not of boredom, but of deep love and happiness! - at multiple points throughout the story. This is an absolutely gorgeous story, masterfully told and beautifully written. Thank you for writing this and sharing it with the world.

W-O-W, just W-O-W! Thank you for sharing your writing ability and this great story.

This work reminds me of my favorite author, James Michenor. KInda wish it had been my life!

I really enjoy this story. Enjoy it more and more every time I read it. It is one of those story's that could happen in real life.

It was a great story.

What a great story line, you are a great writer. Times I almost wet my pants from laughing, choked up a few times, could relate, married for 40 years.

I’ve read this now five times…never gets old. One of the absolute best…!!!

I don’t think I could ever put into words how great of a story this is. You found the perfect way to tell a love story that, by all accounts shouldn’t work. As I read it I had this nagging feeling in the back of my mind that something was going to happen. At some point you were going to pull the rug out from under us and add some dramatic disaster that would ruin everything, but you didn’t. At the same time, you weren’t afraid to tell every emotion that would and should be there in every situation. And because of that there’s one word I can use to describe this. This story is real. And in the 14 going on 15 years since this final chapter was published, I can only wonder how many of your readers’ hearts you touched with your writings. In my last comments I said that I hope you continue to return here to see all the love your story is getting. I still do, but even if you don’t, I know that my fellow readers will continue to come back to this well into the future. As long as this site stays up I think this story will find it’s way into the hearts of many, some who may not even be born yet. And that is beautiful…

Such a good story well writen would be a best seller if all reader's keep a open mind it's got everything that's needed fto keep you there on the edge of your seat you can cry ,laugh,wonder, and enjoy it needs more the 5 stars congrats on a wonderful story thank you

I’m glad that I was able to read the entire store from start to finish in 1 day. This is one of the best love stories I have ever read. I wish and I’m sure there are other readers who wish they had a loving relationship with their own partner and family as Bobby and Colleen had.

Thank you Texas Refugee for the time and effort you put into sharing Bobby and Colleen’s story.

This is by far the best story. I dont really go for the sex,i enjoy the romance of it and the forbidden love. Really well written

I just read it for the second time. I really hope you continue writing. Best romance i have read. It's almost a cross between Nicholas Sparks and Nora Roberts. Very well written.

Perfection. That's all that needs to be said really.

Very well crafted, well written, nice chatacters, nice outcomes, no lose ends and - thank heavens - you actually finished it, unlike so many others on here.

A late life sequel to round off their lives would be really welcome, but even so this was a great read.

Rapier

I want you to know I have laughed I have cried thru all three of this series . I want to thank you for writing it

All that was missing from this great adventure was the white picket fence in the front yard. Thank you so much for your imagination and well-crafted story writing effort.

I cry, I laughed, and was excited with this story. Great job. The feeling that you put into this makes it feel so real that it was very moving. I just lost the love of my life after 50 years of marriage and this story affected me in more ways than can be explained. Thank you so much for writing, I know it's not easy and to keep it consistent. Bravo, thanks again

Beautiful series!

I enjoyed this series, too bad the author doesn't seem to post any longer.

A couple of plot holes, (the sister didn't have any friends in town that she would have casually mentioned her brother to? They didn't seem to worry about genetic issues before having kids, They never mentioned her late husband to the children...two were his...seems odd if she loved him as much as the author says), but overall he tried to keep it plausible, even if everyone seemed too nice

Well worth reading.

Loved the story, I'm 58 as of today and haven't found a love as sweet as this story. Oh I wish I could.

Your other contributor was right - except for the two assholes and Barbara everybody was almost too nice. I really enjoyed the story because I am a romantic at heart. My wife couldn’t get over them beinging brother and sister but I always heard “love is blind”or something close to that. Loved all the children and their close relationships and thought nothing of Christopher’s relationship. Early in the 2nd chapter, you had

Bobby making a couple of statements which Made me think that Colleen would die early but you kept her alive and that is good. It was truly a love story and it shows that you put a lot of time and energy into writing it You are to be commended for it. The only problem was a few spelling errors and, if I remember properly, a couple of punctuation issues. It is still a great read AND I did it in one setting. 😀. Best of luck in any other story. I’m going to “follow” you to see if you write anything else.

Read for the third time now (within less than a year), still as great as I remembered it

One of the most enjoyable story's I have ever read 5 star

You have Great talent for writing. I shed many tears. Please continue with other stories. Clean this up a little and it will be a best seller book.

I laughed and I cried. Loved the story. It hits a spot I have never achieved. It hurts but gives hope that it will happen. I took the dare and read all three chapters in one day....all day. Great story and hope you write more!!! Thank you for this.

A shame that this author has not written more here. Re-read "Collen" for the third time and still find it glorious. Still looking for that kind of love.

This has been the second or third reading, and I, again, immensely enjoyed it. There are two things that I particularly like about this romantic story. One being the family aspect, and I'm not talking about Colleen and Bobby being siblings primarily. It leaves me wistful to read this, I feel in sync with coyote62's comment, so to speak.

The other major achievement is that, as the author statet, the sex reflects the professed feelings of our protagonists. I had just read a long winding romantic story before, a siblings' tale, too, I was hooked on the story line, and the male character, a young widower with child, was labeld as mature much beyond his age. But there was such a plethora of sex scenes, most often blowjob/ "facefuck" descriptions taken from pornflics obviously, it was disheartening to read. The theme of gagging, eating cum, making his sister almost lose consciousness, phrases like "being a good girl", a lot of porn and "ghetto" slang- for me this was so dissonant it hurt. So the author's idea of maturity and love was that the male, even the mature one, even the good guy, has to always takes what he wants sexually and to dominate his partner? It was literally expressed this way repeatedly, as well as the notion that the best sex between lovers is a replay of moves and behaviours advertised in porn movies. And of course the sister had to have melon- sized tits on a tiny and bony body (the author's words), which was also declared as the new or recent ideal of the female body. I was sad to learn how many raving comments have been left there.

So why am I boring you by telling you this? To express how much more the beauty of "Colleen" struck me when reading it directly after the smut I mentioned. Don't get me wrong, I don't say there's only one way to do things right, but boy, this was like listening to your favourite music after hearing some sort of cacophony for a couple of days. And seeing the resonance "Colleen" is evoking I also am confident that not everyone is completely and utterly conditioned and brainwashed by mass media/ porn industry.

Once again I see this trash in the hall of fame. What's wrong with you people? Why Beyond the Borderline isn't there? It's beyond my comprehension.

The MC is nobody, he's made of rice pudding. And the scene about a simultaneous conception is ridiculous. The author has no idea about a female body works.

Great story? Check

Great sex scenes? Check

Emotional twists/attachment? Check

Beautifully done!

Well done, well written, captivating, and really realistic.

I know that I read this more than a year ago. I usually comment on the things that I like, so I'm really surprised that I left nothing here before now.

I voted 5/5 for the first and last chapters and 4/5 for the middle. But overall I loved the whole story. The part about the three youngest tending to the grave of the two older sister's Dad was especially moving. There were several times in the whole series that I got emotional over beautiful or happy scenes like that.

I'm writing my own garbage and posting it on this same website. Not all of it is incest, but some of it is. Polyamory like the story of the bisexuals Sara and Sarah in this story is a common theme in my stuff too. I hope that you do a detailed story on those two. You may have already done it and I just have not looked to see it yet. I know that in one of your forwards you mentioned spin-offs from this tale so maybe it is out there already.

Nice job and I hope you continue giving us more tales and adventures.

I have read the story multiple times, and each time it is an amazingly great story with lots of background on family and interesting subplots! There are not enough stars to rate it. It is one of top 5 I have read on this site!

BR Cajun Guy

This has to be one of the best stories that i have ever read loved every part right up to the finding the lump in not ashamed to having a tear form

The maximum dilation of the cervix is 10 cm

Enjoyed the saga.

I did wonder what happened to Barbara.

Great Story. What the hell happened to Barbara. Sounded like she was having sex with two men every day. Is that just what female lawyers do?

Damn, I really hated to end this story. I loved this story so much. Thanks for sharing . Being a old man, I would have never read a book named Coleen. Not my cup of tea. But this story was great, even though I lost sleep reading through the night. ☆☆☆☆☆

Great story and the love of the whole family,, internal and external,,,, there were funny parts where I was lmao so much ,, the part about why does this baby hate me ,,, lack of sleep and diapers,,, lol

When Mrs. Lopez asked about anything else for Chicago ,, maybe he should of got closure for Barbra ,, that’s the only thing that has me hanging

Overall great story 👍🏻👍🏻

I read this story twice and I have to say you did not waste your time writing it. I think I cried 3 or 4 times and had 2 or 3 really good belly laughs. Great piece of work.

Obviously a labour of love. Thank you for this wonderful imaginative love story.

1 of the very best stories on here, regardless of the genre.

What happened to Barbara? Dying to know. 🙂

I like brother and sister stories in the incest genre. I haven’t been a victim at eight years old or something that you never happen to anybody, I was in a relationship for a short time with my sister. It was a very confusing time in my life for 48 years until I finally got the help I needed to get past the confusion I had from eight years old.

After read this story, I look back at what could’ve been and then realize that though this is just a story… It could have been me in real life. I have felt different ways different times throughout my life about this scenario, but had this been my scenario I would have loved to have been the lead role of your story.

Thank you for writing a story that can have only touched me in a way that did not hollow me out and make me feel trapped as an eight year old again. I was very touched and moved and amused with a lot of your writing. Had this been in the romantic venue as your preface or conclusion paragraph stated I would never have read this and that would’ve been a loss to me.

Damn. I cried and laughed and cried and read it straight through. I finally got dinner at 1:30 a.m. A beautiful and timeless story.

What happened to Barbara is irrelevant. Life is full of people like her and it's pointless to wonder. Her story would not end well. Stone cold for 2 years. She came up short, was incapable of love and would never be happy. People like her think of life as a game and can't comprehend love. He was right to ditch her in the story line. She would detract from what is a beautiful and well written story about what it means to be human.

Well....I took your challenge and read all three chapters in one sitting. I laughed...I cried... my heart fluttered. I could imagine the characters and settings. The story flowed so well and was so believable. Thank you for such a wonderful work of art.

These 3 chapters gave me everything I look for on Literotica. “Colleen” helped me to experience a vast range of satisfying emotions. Great work, Texas Refugee.

PERFECT!

Now I finished my fourth reading of the story. I Don’t have anything to say about this magnifecent tale that my fellow commentators didn't say already. The only thing I can say right now is that after TexasRefugee showed up on Literotica, delievered one hell of a Magnum Opus and right after he finished it he disappeared just as sudden and swiftly as he had first appeared back in 2005. (17 years ago, damn)

Who could not love this story I only wish I could have been Bobby what a lucky fellow

After reading a number of comments, I find that there is nothing positive that I can say that hasn't been said. I just want to add my personal thank you for a wonderful story, and for the range of emotions that your story caused me to feel. Thank you!

excellent story

Fantastic story. Quite a long read but I couldn't put it down from start to finish! Thanks. Hope theres more to come!!

Absolutely fabulous story! So well thought out and written. I enjoyed every nuance of it. I applaud and appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and creative abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.

Thank you! One of my top 10, all time.

You haven't submitted a story in many years, but if you happen to read your recent comments, you will understand your writing is well appreciated.

After reading quite a few of the wonderful comments previously written, its hard to say anything meaningful other than a sincere thank you. This story is tied as the best story that I’ve read on Lit. (I read on the Lit. website just about every day.)

Wow you really made a statement when you wrote this in 2005 when you delivered this amazing story and your very first one at that. what a shame you didn’t continue on with your writing career.⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I still love this story. Wish you would write again

A simply fabulous story, well written, great character development. Couldn't stop reading, my third time reading through.

I loved it again the second time, too

Read it all in one sitting

The greatest description of youth soccer I have ever read........... Soccer Dad.....

Great

This is still the best story I have read for the 3rd time on this site and know doubt I will read it again in the future

I just love the concept of family, and this tale nails the greatness of it. Great work

This was a great story, I loved the character development. Too bad you have not written more. I hope you are OK.

5/5, thanks.

Cool twist on siblings being so close and able to find happiness in one another.

3 for 3. This trilogy is one for the books. And I mean that unironically. I'd pay cash for a book of this.

I'm a grown adult, but some of the sweetness in this saga had me squirming like a schoolgirl.

I loved the story thanks for working hard for us to be able to read it.

THANK YOU

Remarkable…. Thank you!

Quite the story. At the end, the characters seemed to be as real as anyone else I know.

Wow, a thousand comments. That is a sign of excellent writing! Thanks for sharing!

The absolute best story I have ever read. Thank You so very much.