All Comments on 'Dorothy's Weekend'

"as my organ began spewing sperm." Wow, that was so poorly worded, I just started laughing out loud. As if the Geek Team Captain wrote this while still a virgin and dreaming about what life might be like if he ever actually got laid.

Her EYES grew big?!! A nice effort, and I hope you will write more, but ASK FOR AN EDITOR.

Yes, she got really bug-eyed. They opened really wide. They got big.