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Click here"I really don't do that kind of thing, Sarah." The man replied. "Something like this takes resources, and you're asking me to go after three women. Do you know where they are, and are they in the same place?"
"No sir, not exactly." Sarah answered, not confident that he would help her. "I have an idea where they are and who has them. However, they are in three different states."
"The more you describe this, the more complicated it's becoming." He replied, letting out a sigh and looking down momentarily before continuing. "Do you have money that can help finance a rescue?"
Sarah was about to cry. This man was her last chance to get her daughters back. Her life had fallen apart, and she needed something, anything, to go her way. She lowered her head and answered him, "No, I don't. I don't have any money. I used the last for cab fare to see you. You say rescue, but if you ask them, they'll tell you they don't want to leave. They've been brainwashed and believe they love these men. Please help me, I have nowhere else to go."
- COMMENTS
Anonymous2 months agoThis went wrong when Dave lost his way, or just as importantly, did not find his way. He is incredibly underused, he has no real character arc, and that is a problem in this category. His mother could have helped him, his sister could have told him what she needed, or it could have been a project with his best friend. He could have been inspired by his friend's actions at the frat house and worked on himself, so he could take care of family matters. Lindsey not taking more charge of Sarah was a miss, and Dad letting too many people in was also a miss.
There is no one way this HAD to go, except family growth together, or character growth arcs as they separate as most siblings/ too-close relations must, in the end.
The family and incest part of this, where people grow closer in taboo, romance, eroticism or growing their future together is gone.
You are an interesting writer, clearly you get readers' attention, as I have given thought to your work!
Good luck!
Anonymousover 2 years agoI was hoping Dave would step up and take charge along with the two friends that moved in. I always like mother/daughter very hot. That could have still happen with Dave and friends. As always, very good writing.
AssassinWolfover 2 years agoAuthorYou all are jumping the gun. If you read my other stories you know I jump forward, but don’t always stay there. Sarah is retelling her story. We just see who she’s telling it to and why.
Most stories on here run linear. They start and stop along one timeline. Also, don’t mistake the jump to the future for the end. We have many more chapters left.
The suggestion of branding is planned, but you’ll have to read all three series to see it all. Those are Santo Diablo, Family Submission, and the new one not posted yet; Crimson. The next chapters of Santo Diablo and Family Submission will come next. After that the first chapter of Crimson will land.
Anonymousover 2 years agoGood twist to the story at the end there. It may not be where people wanted it to go but it keeps it interesting. Look forward to seeing what happens next in your expanding universe.
