All Comments on 'Hypnotized by the Pool?! Pt. 04'

not as good as previous chapters. The final hook, making her into the Director's personal Slut/whore was flat at best. The pay off was very disappointing. I could have (and have had women wear) much sluttier outfits to a gaming store before. Clearly you know a thing about MTG, but tried not to show it? Again, you TOLD us that her outfit was slutty. But even when you finally SHOWED us, it was very flat. I would have rather showed the reactions of the men and woman in the shop to her outfit of choice. Besides for a girl who seems to constantly want sex... that outfit wasnt one to alllow her to get it very easily.

love this series keep it up! <3

I like the series a lot. Was hoping the embarrassment of being with Robbie would be more of a theme, more details of experiencing that discussed.

But it's still very good and I'll keep reading regardless. Thank you for writing!

pls dont let this story incomplete its a good one <3