All Comments on 'Lusty Legal Partners (LLP) Ch. 08'

Great story line. Almost 5*. Thanks.

Fabulous storey. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I gave you a five because of the overall story was really well written. However, you never really explained why the need for them to act like a cock and a slut, there was a disconnection. Your conclusion of this story in this final installment was not quite believable and you really didn’t give much detail about the evidence and the sex was mundane at best. You also had a lot of grammatical errors and some spelling errors which were not present in other chapters, it’s like you were in a hurry to get this one out and conclude what had been a very good storyline. I would like to see you do a rewrite at some point, but don’t quit writing, just don’t be in a hurry too get a story out that you have a disconnect between chapters.

dirtyharry6971

You showed yourself to be a very perceptive reader when you wrote: “It’s like you were in a hurry to get this one out…” You are exactly right! I have reposted an edited version of the chapter 8 but, I confess, although you make other equally valid points about this chapter, I did not make any other effort to improve it other than to catch as many errors as I could find. I struggled with this chapter and have no wish to rewrite the weaker parts.