All Comments on 'My Favorite Realtor Ch. 03'

Counted nearly 20 mistakes... I didn't read it ALL because there were giant breaks between that kept making me believe that they were over (or the story was).

Must why you write more stories: So people have to finish a piece of crap so that the NEXT one will make sense!

I agree, there are a lot of mistakes in this story. I started using an editor some time after this, so hopefully that would improve if you were to continue reading.