by Tom_Brown
10 Big Blazing stars for a hot hot hot story! The Process just takes time. But be careful since he is close by, he could just slip her his address and she could be over to his house everyday for a quicky and before long you be out of a wife. Thanks, for the effort.
I like it, 5*s for sure. You need to do a little bit of refining the story's flow, however. When you Write the players are talking, then the next paragraph is they have already completed whatever travel, or thing they were discussing. It would flow better if you , say write it as "we arrived, at the 'place' and then did, etc.
When I started dating my now-wife, I knew that she had slept around pretty actively, including some of my work colleagues. She’s still a trooper and far from objecting, I think it’s hot and she’s aware of that. Enjoyed the story. After oral my wife always gives me a special kiss. I like that too..
JT