All Comments on 'My Neighbor is a Slave Trader Pt. 03'

You're making them too short, all 3 chapters so far could have been just one long story

keep them coming

Keep up the good work, part 4 please!!!

I know they are short, that's the idea. The idea is that they were written relatively short, as if they were episodes of a TV series that will leave the viewer for the next chapter. Still, I'll keep that in mind for future stories.

Each story was a good length, pace was good and kept the intrigue ...Not too much detail not too little...all round well told...... Great in fantasy land, but sadly i imagine this sort of thing really happens.

I hope there is more coming! This is an interesting read. As other's have said, a proof reader would take care of some of the nagging details. What I've found is to come back to what you're written a day or so later and read it again when the stream of words can be read from a reader's perspective and not a writer's. The characters are pretty good, the story went in directions I wasn't expecting, which is great, and the pacing is good. I look forward to more if you're inclined to keep writing.