All Comments on 'My Wife and Her Boyfriend!!'

If wife is smart she'll dump the sissy wimp loser, and find a real man.

"My wife's boyfriend."

Am I the only one who finds that sentence ridiculous? Grow a pair and toss that bitch away.

Why write in 1st person when you have the narrator have as much emotional reaction -- maybe less -- than an impersonal 3rd person narrator. He just goes along with everything, but there's no reason why. In 3rd person it may have worked, but in 1st it's inane.

Very little detail beyond boyfriend's big dick. Tell us about her body, her boobs and pussy in particular. Describe the fucking in detail. Show us some emotions. Check your grammar: you have present tense and past tense verbs in the same sentence. That makes the story hard to follow. Sorry, no stars.

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