All Comments on 'New Life Ch. 03'

This is an excellent story line and you definitely need to continue it. The sex not withstanding, it is a good plot and the flow woeks well.

From the first chapter I thought it would go in a different direction, then it seemed to again in this chapter but then you veered away again.. I get that's he's a nice guy and all.. but this is a sex story site and the theme is mind control.. And you're writing a story where he has it but feels bad using it and when he does abruptly stops.. Hardly satisfying.

I am pleased so far. Resolving ethical dilemmas is rarely simple or clearcut. Write your story. Don't worry about categories.