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All Comments on 'Sorority House Mouse Scene 01: MF(F)'

by Jenna_Lavender

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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

You keep switching between present and past tense. Story’s hot, but that bit needs work.

JIMSVANOJIMSVANOover 1 year ago

Excellent! Like the "House Mouse" concept. Would love to read many more in this series. For only 1 story submitted you write extremely well. Look Forward to reading more of your writings.

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