All Comments on 'Tales from the Natural Order Pt. 13'

I don't know if this is the end of this story or not but I do know that I would have enjoyed the story more had David not relinquished his manhood so easily. I would have enjoyed reading conversations between Susan and David regarding the future of their marriage.

AMAZING story!!!! Really well managed chapter by chapter!!! Well done!!!

We are waiting for the divorce.

Just finished reading this submission again and thought I've been checking this site daily for "this". The conclusion (if it is the conclusion) was very disappointing. A man with a successful business career and family is willing to let that life just "go" to become "less than a man"? I find that difficult to believe and wished I had not anticipated this chapter as much as I did. Should this not be the conclusion perhaps in future chapters David will recover his manliness.

Raoul and Susan's lovemaking needs to be witnessed by David. So far its been behind closed doors. Looks like next chapter perhaps?

Fantastic story! I look forward to future developments!