by taylorstorms
Been following this story since the beginning, but the last several chapters have become a struggle. There was momentum coming out of the Roommates novella, but the animating purpose of the characters has been lost. There just doesn’t seem to be much to the Liam and Blake relationship, so the reader is left to wonder what either sees in the other. Marie’s passion for Liam and her desire to explore her sexual boundaries animated the Marie/Liam relationship. Blake was only a solid foil, but has never evolved into a 2 dimensional low key slut and Cam Girl with some personal problems, and, candidly, without Marie, Liam is just a confused version of the cliched big dicked stud. In short, you’ve created a typical slut/stud erotic couplings story but with no sex.