All Comments on 'The Treehouse Ch. 01'

You tell a good story, and I like your unhurried approach. Your writing is better than you perhaps think, given your introduction comment. I do think you need to relax your dialogue. It gets the job done, but it stilted and robotic. People often do not speak in complete sentences, are fragmentary and clipped, and rarely use textbook English. Give it a try.

Please write more!

Thank you so much. I appreciate your constructive criticism. I think that more "careful" speech is something that I personally find attractive, but I'll keep your suggestion in mind. I guess I don't feel very confident with my writing and I always struggled with the grammatical side of it. I might be overcompensating for that.

I Really enjoyed this story. Great job developing the main character quickly with no waste words and making her real and relatable. I would love to read more.