All Comments on 'The Weekend Retreat Ch. 02'

I'm interested to see where you take this story, but I hate Liam so much that I felt the need to switch from the app I normally use to the website just so I could ask you not let Mia get involved with him. He doesn't seem like a good person, and she already dislikes a lot about him. However, It would be funny if Mia found a different guy that fits Liam's loose description and spends the weekend with him instead. The whole "oops, I thought you were someone else" thing.

I agree, Liam is a prick and he doesn't seem to push to many of the lovely Mia boxes

I’ve enjoyed the first couple of episodes so thank you. The only little grumble is that chapter 2 has quite a few typos in it. It would have been worth proof reading everything to pick up things like this.

This chapter was really excited me. It was so well written that I felt like i was immersed in the scene in the bathroom and was very arousing look forward to reading more chapters.

P.s I hope Mia finds a dom that will turn her fantasies into a reality in the retreat and hopefully it isn't Liam ;)

GOOD START

to what has the makings of a great story. I'm looking forward to Mia's real interactions with the doms (and maybe with other subs???) Liam may seem like a prick, but isn't he acting like a dom should? Your writing is excellent, easy to follow and visualize the scenes. Yes, it could use some proof-reading, but that doesn't lessen the enjoymentt I'm getting from reading it. Keep it up!

Not just typos. " She needed her dominant to hug her close unappreciative you. (????)" 'He'd be fully addressed (??????????), it was a punishment after all. But, he'd wear something sharp so she wouldn't feel self conscious. In this scenario, she imagined him wearing his favourite black watch would adorn her wrist (????????), a crisp white shirt paired with navy trousers. "

Please fix/be more careful so face enjoy fun we can yesterday :-)

But seriously, good story that is occasionally incomprehensible, and I also hope Liam grows up

I appreciate the feedback regarding the grammatical errors and unfinished sentences. I write between shifts at work but I should have definitely proof read this more. I have updated my chapter and sent it to the editors for updating. I will be more careful in upcoming chapters :) thanks again I really appreciate it!

I’m so delighted to have some engagement in this chapter and really appreciate you leaving a note. I hope you enjoy chapter 3. Sorry for the late reply, I’ve just figured out you can reply to comments

Thank you so much :) I really appreciate your feedback: it actually made me super teary. I’m glad that the characters are somewhat engaging too. You’re the first comment to show the conflict in Liam and Thats a relief that he’s not a straightforward bit. Sorry, for the late reply I just figured out how to reply to people!

Aww I really needed to read your comment today! I really needed it after such a rubbish day. I hope you enjoy chapter 3 :) it’s up if you would like to read it :)

I enjoyed so many aspects of this series thus far, but I couldn't keep reading - the racism and sexism were too much. Would have loved for this to be a piece of writing that could be enjoyed without reflecting on how much unchecked bias exists in our society.