All Comments on 'Tom and Kayla Ch. 01'

First Lit story. Congrats. It was good, well written . Probably could have been longer. From the minute that video tape clunked into the VCR the erotic tension started and it reaches its zenith when he pulls down his pants. For me there could have been a lot more push and pull there. Play up his embarrassment and her confidence in coaxing him out of his clothes. Stretch it out for us a bit more. It’s cfnm, one of the best ingredients in CFNM is the embarrassment in the situation.

I did like your ending.