All Comments on 'Training a New Domme Ch. 01'

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Peter_Peter_over 11 years ago
Great start

Can't wait for more

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
Would shine with an editor's help

Typos.

Continuity errors. First no kitchen, then there is a kitchen?

Room service knocked on door. Second visitor rang doorbell: "heard doorbells ring a second time."

"sub", for submissive, is not to be capitalized.

Missing word, incorrect words.

These are distracting, making it difficult to read and enjoy the story.

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Domme female, 50 years old. Used to have two males in my stable, now have my main sub and a female pet. It's good to be a Domme!

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