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AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

You probably should have added a link to the tie-in stories, A Female from Another World Parts 1-3 and A Strange Planet called Zigrida in 8 parts.

abiostudent3abiostudent3over 2 years ago

This was a little rough. It just went from, "this thing happened," to, "this thing happened," without any details or descriptions. That makes the whole chapter feel disjointed and choppy - if you consider going back and expanding a lot of the scenes, you'd have a much better story. Right now it feels like the outlines for a story, without the dialogue and descriptions and emotions.

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