All Comments on 'Venus Flytrap'

Buy a new keyboard. I stopped reading after 4 paragraphs due to the frequent over use of "..." in them. Judging from what was seen scanning down to the comments box the authors keyboard must have a worn out period key. Needs to return to grade school and learn grammer over again. The story also needed to be relisted to the proper section.

Hey, it's a first submission! So let's encourage new writers or we don't have anything to read. <P>

That said it could be improved. I did like the humor and the dialogue. The conversion from "bad" girl to "good" girl seems a little contrived but then I am not exactly sure that she did actually convert.<P>

I appreciate your efforts. Thanks for sharing.

moral difference between the girl predator and the asshole car salesman. Between drugging someone's drink and using using her crystal to make him a party favor at a gay bar, he does less damage. I don't accept it only lets someone do something they would do anyway, nothing they would be opposed to. Since she had had sex before you could also say the same about her drugged drink, (except she would just be with one person instead of an equivilent gangbang).

And it is very obvious that she is practiced at this and has done it before many times. She is almost as pure and innocent as a $5 crack whore.